I am a student at in Uru Mānuka. In 2020 I was a year 7 and in 2021 I will be a year 8. This is a place where I will be able to share my learning with you. Please note....some work won't be edited - just my first drafts, so there may be some surface errors. I would love your feedback, comments, thoughts and ideas.
Hy my name is Connor from Hornby Primary School. I like that you made your sentences short and that you put and they lived deadly ever after. Next time you could use gigantic words.
Tino pai, Wow you knocked my socks off with your six sentence story especially when you signed off “and they lived deadly ever after". I will be showing other teachers this idea of a six sentence story. Did you enjoy writing using this Six Sentence style?
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Hy my name is Connor from Hornby Primary School. I like that you made your sentences short and that you put and they lived deadly ever after. Next time you could use gigantic words.
ReplyDeleteGigantic words? What are those?
DeleteTino pai, Wow you knocked my socks off with your six sentence story especially when you signed off “and they lived deadly ever after". I will be showing other teachers this idea of a six sentence story. Did you enjoy writing using this Six Sentence style?
ReplyDeleteYes Writing was Way more exciting using six sentence style.
Deletegreat work Dylan from hunter B
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