Simple To Complex Sentences
- The dog ate.
- The dog ate noisily.
- Last night, the dog ate noisily.
- Last night, in the kitchen, the dog ate noisily.
- Last night, in the kitchen, the pig-like dog ate noisily.
Tuesday, 3 March 2020
Simple to Complex Sentences
Today in Hurumanu 3 we have been practicing Simple to Complex sentences for our writing assessment. And to improve our writing and make it more interesting. For the sentences, we added new words each time to improve it from Simple to Complex. For our simple sentence, we had... The dog ate. This is my work... Feel free to leave a comment!
Simple To Complex Sentences
Simple To Complex Sentences
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and this is why we don't have a dog hahah. Well written Dylan
ReplyDeleteHahaha Thanks Mum
ReplyDeleteAwesome, Dylan! Thanks for sharing your work from the writing lesson. I like how you highlighted the new parts each time. My only feedback would be to check #5, as the ending is running off the page. It would be great to be able to read the sentence in it's entirety!
ReplyDelete- Miss Birtch
There you go Miss Birtch...
DeleteI fixed it!
Dylan
ReplyDeleteI love to see this sort of development.. I am a bit of a creative writer myself. Your development of the writing starts to add interest as the complexity increases. I'd love to see what you would add next with this sentence. What might a next sentence be?
Hi Mr Sutton
DeleteThanks for commenting!
I think my next sentence would be why the dog was eating noisily eg. Last night, in the kitchen, the pig-like dog ate noisily because he hadn't been fed for ages.
Dylan
DeleteWonderful.. you can see the richness developing in the story when you do this. What next?
I am honestly not sure what to do next.
DeleteI think if we add more to the sentence it would become a paragraph.
But if we did add something else I think it would be what.
Eg. Last night, in the kitchen, the pig-like dog ate mashed up chicken noisily because he hadn't been fed for ages.
Dylan
DeleteMy apologies for not being clear.. I wasn't suggesting adding more to the sentence. I was wondering what a next sentence might look like? i.e., how could you continue the story? Great work...
Awesome work Dylan. And great to see it recognized by your teachers. I didnt think our dog was "pig-like", but she does eat noisily!
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